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Grammar mistakes

If you have found out grammar mistakes in english version of site, please reply in this thread.

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P.S. In this section only english language is resolved, so all posts in russian will be deleted :)

Re: Grammar mistakes

Not quite a mistakes, but I think you should know.

On main page:
"to start to play" - I`d say "start playing".
"to find online game" - maybe "an online game"?
"would like you" - "you would like" suits better. And this whole sentence is a mess. You should reconsider the translation and make it more literary.
"to enjoy by multiplayer role game" - I don`t see any real necessity in this "by".
"adherents" - just too odd. Maybe "familiar"?
"fantastic middle ages world" - you should say "medieval world".
"the hunter on the monsters" - "monster hunter".
"marine wolf" - AFAIR it`s "sea wolf".
"hunter for ancient treasures" - again "ancient treasures hunter".
"If you want to become...just to find the friends?" - W0W! That sentence is a nonsence. In the russian version either. Work on it.
"to be the one, by whom you wish" - again odd. Try to re-translate it in some other way.

That`s so far for the main page.

P.S. BTW English language don`t need as much commas as russian does.

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[QUOTE=napancux]
"to be the one, by whom you wish" - again odd. Try to re-translate it in some other way.
[/QUOTE]

"to become the one you want" is a variant

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[quote=diss]"to become the one you want" is a variant[/quote]

"to become" and "to be" - different meaning verbs

may be: to be anyone you want (like, prefer)

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Well lets continue. Now it`s FAQ (with capital "A").

1) "How to start play Ultima Online!?" - I think it would be "start playing".

1. "you need to start play Ultima" - "to start playing".
2. "account is registered" - maybe "is being registered"?
3. "with a view of safety" - better to say "for the sake of security" or something like that.
4. "Download the game, if you already" - the sentence is incorrect. You should say "Download the game.(dot!) If you already..."
5. "If you download game" - "the game".
6. "Now extract file" - "now unpack file".
7. "find and execute client.exe" - "find and launch".
8. "appeared window of game" - maybe "of the game"?
9. "the page of creating your character" - "character creation page".
10. "game universe Ultima" - "game universe of Ultima...".
11. "life in Ultima online has been started" - I`m not sure of it, but maybe "have been started" or "have started"?
12. "can gather in section" - "can get in the section".
13. " forum of game" - "game forum".

2) "Creating character" - you should say "Character creation".

1. "will be asked, whom you wish" - I think it looks like "asked of who you wish".
2. "Safely choose the third way." - wrong word order. "Choose the third way safely".
3. "Strength influences on power of your hit, and on maximal weight" - no need for "on". "Strength influences power of your hit, and maximal weight..".
4. "magic lives" - "lifes"(!!!)
5. "The more mana has than more spells for time you can make." - stupid sentence (in russian too). This should be "The more mana he has the more spells at a time he can cast." or "The more mana you have the more spells at a time you can cast.". Feel the difference.
6. "be equal 50" - I think "equal to".
7. "to say of a spell" - "to cast a spell" (!!).
8. "that the most part of them will work" - it's better to say "that most of them will work (or succeed)".
9. "Secondary you may choose" - maybe "as for second you may choose"?
10. "allow you to make itself the weapons and armours" - "to make weapons and armour by yourself".
11. "basically it chooses" - "it is chosen", I think.
12. "is difficult process" - "is a difficult".
13. "it need a lot" - "it needs".
14. "choose Minoc as in it there" - "as there".
15. "can battle not to the strongest" - perhaps "battle with not-so-strong monsters", but you should re-translate that sentence anyway.

That`s it. For now.

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[QUOTE]It is not easy to find an online game, which you would like at once, and if you need a free multiplayer online game, begins even more difficult to find the ideal, because the game should like not only for you, but also to all other players, with whom you will play at huge MMORPG world.[/QUOTE]

This sentence doesn't have any meaning at all)) try to simplify it somehow and break into several small sentences. And don't use these silly online translators ;)

It takes some time to find an online game which you will like at once. If you are searching for a free multiplayer online game, it is difficult to find the perfect one, as different players has different ideals.

[QUOTE]in a circle of the friends and familiar[/QUOTE]

totall mess))))
"among friends"-shorter and better)

[QUOTE]In Ultima Online practically there are no limits for self-expression![/QUOTE]

You have to say " In Ultima Online there are practically no limits for self-expression!"

[QUOTE]without any limitations![/QUOTE]

Just "without any limits"

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So, dear Staff, I can help you with editing of all english version ( I hope my knowledge of english is good enough for that). Write to my ICQ and we will make a deal;)

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As i have seen from your previous post, your knowledge is exactly what we need. If you'll accept this burden of translating every page, we'll be most graetful ;)

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London is a capital of great Britain

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[QUOTE=Бодун;119549]London is a capital of great Britain[/QUOTE]

How did you spend your vacations?

BTW, I would also check and correct mistakes in game. The scripters are good in scripting, but not in English.

When trying to cast Ignition spell using a scroll, you have the following message if your Magery skill is too low:

"Your skill Magery small for cast this spells."

Funny, eh? ;)

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When you break your hatchet, you see: "You hatchet may have been destroyer".

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A? Sprehen zi doich?

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Мде народу нефик делать)

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Silly... Topic have been made mistake-targeted... And forn`t about else. Stuff, clear the dust everywhere, please. ;)

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4o vi***nim svoim znaniem angilsova jazika :) :)

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A? Genosse? was iz das? Sprehen zi? Nain? Aufederzein, ik :)

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[QUOTE=Бодун;119549]London is a capital of great Britain[/QUOTE]

ржунимагу

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[quote=FlyerOK;163600]Hello! Mai neim is Vova. Ai liv in Krasnodar.Ai wont rashen gёrl tu bi mai yaif. Ai hev 1-room villa and moped. Ai lav kumыs, konina, belяshi. Cam on, gёrl, wi shal bi heppi![/quote]

Monster ^^

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Monsta!!!I ROFLed for about three minutes :)

Err..does it sound OK - "You can`t seem to hide here" - that`s when u make an unsuccesful attempt to hide...

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Hmmm about the "Travel menu", when u click on the teleporting stone...
You wrote 'trEvel menu", It`s trAvel.
lol

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Strange translation at you, in particular last post!

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Natasha, what for you has made one more rename the character? It already nonsense!!!